Anabel Davis

Peer Response

Response to Inquiry Paper

Dear Kolbie,

I think you picked a really interesting topic. I had no idea about the USC Trojans coach had been fired. Your opening line was really nice I liked how you started that with the paper. I think you did a really good job at getting all this info because no had any idea that he would be getting fired. I think you did good at explaining everything well. You said you needed a title  I’m not good at making ones but maybe could use Much Loved USC Football Coach Fired.

When you explain why Kiffin got fired I’m not really sure if its because he’s just been there for a long time and it was time to get a new one or if there is more behind it because it was a surprise to everyone. So maybe you could explain that better. I think you're transitioning was fine. Also I think it would be good to have a conclusion at the end just to wrap everything up. I think its fine if you restate like how it was just a surprise to everyone and tell his roles of being the coach and what he had not done. Where is your work cited missy? But otherwise I think you did really good on this paper.

Anabel Davis